Hi friends,
I present another piano piece, I didnt write it aout completely yet, thats why I post live recording again. Its in F-major and the middle part in my favourite c-minor, i plan to work out further variations in the final version. Feel free to comment.

Piano, F-Major:
http://www.4shared.com/file/67032869/9e0e49bd/solo-piano-F-major.html

Peter

Hi Peter,

I think you really need much stronger melodic material to even think about variations. The piece is pleasant enough, but there is way too much landing on the tonic. It becomes too ingrained to make any impression later on when you've cadenced on your tonic chord for the 20th time (ok, I exaggerate). It's like looking across a long broad plain without even any landmarks to give some interest. The contrasting section is some relief, but it comes too late to save the piece. I think you have the talent to do much better and I hope you continue.

I hope that doesn't sound too harsh. I'm only trying to help you look at it from another perspective. I'm not trying to discourage you - just the opposite.

Hi Peter,

I understand what Scott is saying. The melodic material isn't such that it stays in your mind. If this was popular music I'd say there's no hook. I also agree with Scott that the music is pleasant. I worked with a composition teacher for a while recently who studied with Nadia Boulanger (if you don't know that name Google it). Every American striving to be a composer should know her name. He stressed that one of the things they worked on was devising and revising melodies. He especially stressed the efforts they made at improving melodies.

So spend some time with a melody you've composed, then see if you can make it better. When you think it's as good as it can be wait a day then see if you can't make it better.

Let me give you an example. In my edition of the WTC (Bk 1) there's a variant for theme for the first fugue (C maj). It has the same 3 ascending eighth notes, but in the early version the f is also an eighth note followed by g and f as sixteenth notes. Of course in the later version the f is a dotted eighth and the g and f that follow are 32nd notes. What this does is change a boring turn into a hook. I hope that's helpful.