Hi Poet,
You've succeeded in writing a sad piece and as such it's enjoyable. The way I hear it there's two phrases of your theme then a transitional phrase then a second version of your primary theme for twice through. Then you go up high with the second version and call it a piece. All of which is fine, except that the phrasing gets a bit square after a while, it's all 4 bar phrases and that becomes predictable. Music becomes more interesting when things are not predictable so if I were you I might look for ways to extend one or two of the phrases and/or change up the harmonic progression. It's a nice first draft, but can you dig a little deeper?
sorry for the late reply! Thank you for commenting my composition and giving me advices, I appreciate it! I agree, when I listened to this piece I could feel that something is missing and that it becomes predictable so in the future I intend, when I learn more things about piano music, to record all these compositions including this one and add some new melodies to make them better. You're right, I will, thanks!
